Dune ([info]dune_drd) wrote,
@ 2007-05-27 20:50:00
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Current mood: pensive
Entry tags:fic, fic: dw

Fic: Torn Out Memories
Title: Torn Out Memories
Summary: He breathes in deeply, only now perceiving what the ink formed on the paper
Spoilers: Up to Human Nature
Rating: None
Word count: 336
Notes: Not betaed, because written about 5 minutes ago. Tell me if this is any good?
Fic Masterlist: Here.



John Smith is a man of his time, dreading to be anything other than ordinary.

He wakes from another of his strange dreams, like every day he gets up quickly to scribble them into his journal. It is a nice, relaxing habit, that writing and drawing while his thoughts drift back to his dream and his eyes out of the window.

The blonde girl had been there again, her lips like velvet against his, making his entire body sing with unearthly energy. There had been fear, death, sorrow and blindingly bright light.

He rubs his eyes, the details already fading from his consciousness like the morning mist. He breathes in deeply, only now perceiving what the ink formed on the paper. There's a man in a military uniform there, handsome and young, grinning like a madman. He turns the pages, finds more images of the stranger between the returning scribbles of gas masks and metal monsters. He sees the man collapsed in a corner, maybe shot, certainly dead as the text suggests.

His eyes drift over the rest of the words squeezed next to the portraits of the soldier. His guts fill with dread when he reads about mourning a loyal companion, his hands shake when he reads about love, friendship and shared goodbye-kisses.

The soldier with his military cap grins at him from the middle of the page, even as John Smith tears the pages concerning him out of the journal. He throws them into the smouldering embers of the fireplace, watching as the pages crumple, then blacken and finally catch fire. He smiles when the image of the soldier turns into ash, leaving no trace behind he ever existed. No trace of that utter indecency concerning Smith's dreams about other men.

He focuses on the image of the blonde girl - Rose, he thinks she's called - refining the strands of hair that obscure her lovely face.

Because John Smith is a man of his time, dreading to be anything other than ordinary.






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[info]jadesfire2808
2007-05-27 06:58 pm UTC (link)
Ooh, interesting. I like that idea - his half-memories of Jack and destruction of them to focus on Rose. I found the smile as the pages burn chilling and heart-breaking. Understandable, but so, so sad. *sniff* For some reason, the image that really grabbed me was his eyes and his mind drifting - you really see that in DT's performance, and it just felt real, somehow. *shrugs* I'm a sucker for the unusual detail.

Well, I don't know about anyone else, but I liked it :)

Damn, I hate to tell you this, but the RAF didn't exist until 1918 - they were just the flying arm of the army until then. So 'cap' is fine, but it can't be an RAF one to John Smith. Of course, given John Smith shouldn't know any of that stuff anyway, that might not matter...

Also, I think you mean "he gets up quickly" rather than "he getting up". [/nitpick] ;)

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-27 07:06 pm UTC (link)
There were pages missing, yes. Maybe even more than one or two, this is just my little explanation.

Thanks for the help, have changed what you pointed out :)

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[info]taffimai
2007-05-27 07:07 pm UTC (link)
Very nice. I love the concept.

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-27 08:31 pm UTC (link)
thaaaanks

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[info]glinda_penguin
2007-05-27 07:25 pm UTC (link)
Oh and that attitude's so fitting of the time too.

So sad and lovely though, I really like the idea of Jack being on those torn out pages...

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-27 08:31 pm UTC (link)
what else should be on them? I guess there could be Martha giving him the Kiss of Life, but somehow I just miss Jack too much to write that

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[info]boji
2007-05-27 07:57 pm UTC (link)

Because John Smith is a man of his time, dreading to be anything other than ordinary.


Really nice idea. Do think of developing it. *grin*

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-27 08:32 pm UTC (link)
Uh, I think I'll leave that to others ;)

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[info]nostalgia_lj
2007-05-27 08:02 pm UTC (link)
*hands you the internets* You have won.

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-27 08:33 pm UTC (link)
Is it okay, then?

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[info]nostalgia_lj
2007-05-27 08:44 pm UTC (link)
VERY MUCH SO

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-27 08:55 pm UTC (link)
YAY!

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[info]unfeathered
2007-05-27 09:40 pm UTC (link)
Lovely. This should be canon.

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-27 09:51 pm UTC (link)
Thank you. There are pages missing, so maybe it is canon already? ;)

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[info]crabby_lioness
2007-05-27 11:07 pm UTC (link)
I love this story.

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-28 11:02 am UTC (link)
wheee! :)

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[info]aeshna_uk
2007-05-27 11:46 pm UTC (link)
Very nicely done, and just the right length. And there were indeed pages ripped out just before the Empty Child picture, although things didn't seem to be entirely in order in the book. :)

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-28 11:03 am UTC (link)
Yeah, well, I just wondered why he could've torn those pages out. And just because he maybe spilled his ink pot over them just doesn't sound as interesting, does it?

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[info]nina_ds
2007-05-28 03:54 am UTC (link)
Really beautiful idea - one of the things I loved about John Smith is the way that he is a man of his time.

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-28 11:04 am UTC (link)
thanks. I'm sure there was also John Smith/His Maid pr0n on those pages maybe :)

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[info]cedara
2007-05-28 07:37 am UTC (link)
Yup, that works!

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-28 11:04 am UTC (link)
Good to hear that :)

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[info]ionlylurkhere
2007-05-28 10:55 am UTC (link)
Oh, brilliant!

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-28 11:05 am UTC (link)
thank you :)

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[info]g_shadowslayer
2007-05-28 11:23 am UTC (link)
*whimper* This is SO what happened, I swear!

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-28 11:25 am UTC (link)
It's canon, I'm certain :)

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[info]xwingace
2007-05-28 05:35 pm UTC (link)
Very good, and very intriguing. Also very different from what I just wrote (phew!). It has far more of the connotations of the actual episode than my ficlet, too. So, yay you?

XWA

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-28 06:12 pm UTC (link)
Weeeell, mine's only 300 words or so, I guess your longer fic is allowed to digress a bit more ;) Yours is still excellent, btw

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[info]telperion_15
2007-05-28 06:53 pm UTC (link)
Awww, this is heartbreaking. I didn't notice the torn out pages in the journal, but I'll certainly be rewatching to check on that now!

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-28 10:43 pm UTC (link)
They are there... I just bet there was Jack/Ten, Ten/Martha on them...

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[info]sunstar77
2007-05-28 09:46 pm UTC (link)
I wondered about Jack during that episode. I didn't catch any pictures of Jack in the journal, but I wasn't sure if I had just missed it. Nice fic.

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-28 10:43 pm UTC (link)
thank you :)

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[info]evilgeniuslady
2007-05-29 10:41 pm UTC (link)
Oh yes. This is made of win. Is it can be Jack time nao???

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-30 10:03 am UTC (link)
Ys pleaze!!11!! ^^

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[info]nnwest
2007-05-30 01:24 am UTC (link)
Love the idea in this! Very powerful.

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-30 10:03 am UTC (link)
thank you :)

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[info]chicklet73
2007-05-30 06:15 am UTC (link)
What an intriguing idea - and so well-written. I really enjoyed this!

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[info]dune_drd
2007-05-30 10:03 am UTC (link)
good to hear that, I'm never quite sure before people comment if it is any good :)

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[info]rachel68620
2007-05-30 02:10 pm UTC (link)
Oh I really liked this. And I don't care if things go in order in the Journal. It's definitely more interesting if it's Jack.

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[info]dune_drd
2007-06-01 09:37 pm UTC (link)
thanks :)

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[info]crystalshard
2007-05-31 07:05 pm UTC (link)
What an exploration of those missing pages. I really like the idea that Jack was on those pages, and burning them seems very true to John Smith. Beautiful detail, you captured it extraordinarily well.

Great story.

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[info]dune_drd
2007-06-01 09:37 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much :)

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[info]laurab1
2007-06-02 04:55 pm UTC (link)
Oh, ouch. Lovely, though :)

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[info]dune_drd
2007-06-02 05:02 pm UTC (link)
thank you :)

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Here following links from... somewhere.
[info]lyore
2007-06-19 01:45 pm UTC (link)
It's a little late, but I just wanted to say I loved this fic. The psychology of the Doctor-as-John-Smith is fascinating, and I loved the detail in the writing.

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Re: Here following links from... somewhere.
[info]dune_drd
2007-07-06 03:02 pm UTC (link)
Thank you :)

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[info]anyjen
2009-08-29 05:35 am UTC (link)
Ooooh, so that's why we saw no portrait of Jack in John Smith's journal, even though everybody else was there...

Makes perfect sense, actually, together with everything else in here.

REally nice one. :)

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